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Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Mon Jan 24, 2011 2:41 pm
by earthwulf
Aiight, I'm up to chapter 18. You can check it out on http://www.scribd.com/jason_fink


"Jasmine Cowl and the Salagi Talking Stick"-a modern fantasy - magic set in today's world. A group of childhood friends saved the planet when they were teens... it's been fifteen years and they find they may have to do it again, only this time with families of their own. They have to battle their own problems as well as magical threats...

Yeah, I am using names similar to many of your online handles...

So far:
Ari Xander Hellion
Bermebey
Imday
Bowar, Kade
Brother, John
Captain Ben Stash
Carac
Farun
Jeff Trithik
Kargichee Baltimore
Kynan
Lexelcius Salamander
Macheath, Phil
Medwin
Milly Ravenhead
Nura/Kimota
Rhyndad Wallac
Samira
Skurge Smakeington
Suzerain
Conor Mortikus

There will be more to come - not written in yet, but are in the outline: terro, shan, caryne, Charlie, Danae, Dismas, Hirebrand, & Koras.

Please have a look, tell me what you think & be honest. Pass the link along if you like it. This is still a rough draft,, so there are probably still a ton of errors.

thank y'all

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 4:45 pm
by earthwulf
Just completed chapter 21. Not sure how it happened, but last couple of chapters have quite a bit of a cursing imp named Hellion running around in them. I didn't mean for it to happen.

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 6:37 pm
by Charlie
ha ha nice Hellion gots a potty mouth, I need to catch up im back on ch 17

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 7:41 pm
by earthwulf
Awsome! Thanks, Charlie - This is the first feedback I've gotten at all... is it any good?

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 8:39 pm
by Im'dai
Are is able to put on kindle?

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 8:54 pm
by earthwulf
not yet, I need to format it for such. At least, I don't think I can, it is in PDF form (& others) on scribd

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 9:01 pm
by Skurge
Lol, I love Skurge Smakeington. Great name!

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 10:21 pm
by earthwulf
Oh, and Charlie, - Charlemagne "Chuck" D'Onis makes his debut next chapter

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Tue Mar 08, 2011 12:41 pm
by Charlie
lol now that a name, cool.

Ya Im diggin the story, Ill give more feed back later when I have some time.

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Tue Mar 08, 2011 2:49 pm
by Im'dai
I haven't read anything yet, but I have a suggestion.

You need a Nom De Plume, NOM NOM NOM NOM.

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Sat Sep 29, 2012 12:35 am
by earthwulf
*ahem*

I FUCKING FINISHED THIS SHIT TONIGHT!!ONE11!!ONE

That is all. First book I ever done wrote

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Sat Sep 29, 2012 2:08 pm
by Caryne
I somehow managed to miss all of this. Starting on chapter 1 tonight. Really looking forward to it!!

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Sat Sep 29, 2012 6:46 pm
by Charlie
Sweet I will have to catch up again lol. Way to go Wulf this is a huge accomplishment good work

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Sat Sep 29, 2012 8:00 pm
by earthwulf
Ack. The stuff on scribd is the complete first draft... I'm in edit mode right now - any (and all) suggestions are welcome!!!

Also, I'm not posting the last few chapters...

thanks for the words of support!

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Thu Nov 15, 2012 10:29 am
by Kargarok
Now I have to go read the thing. ^_^

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Thu Nov 15, 2012 5:20 pm
by earthwulf
That would be great - thanks!

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Thu Jan 03, 2013 2:46 pm
by Kargarok
Dang it! What happened to chapter 6? I don't see it on Scribd. >.< I'm really digging the setting and story so far. My one minor critique, (other than typos and such), is that it seems like you are trying to squeeze too much detail into every scene. You have such well thought out characters it seems like you want the readers to know every detail you have in your head about them. Since you're going through an edit anyways I'd say ask yourself as you read every tid bit does this one add to the story or let the reader know something that will add to the story. I'm not saying get rid of them all just analyze them. And give me the rest of the damned book to read. ;P

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Thu Jan 03, 2013 5:25 pm
by earthwulf
Thank you for reading, and for the feedback. While I'm doing the edits I'll keep an eye out for where to make cuts. I overshot my writing goal on purpose just so that I can make drastic cuts if need be. I'll email you the rest; I'm hoping the little email button thingy under your sig (pinkhamandgreer.com) is the right one...

edit: d'oh. apparently it isn't. let me know which one to send it to :D

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Sun Jan 06, 2013 12:06 pm
by Kargarok
Hah, yeah that's my old work e-mail, I'll update it but for now, send it to kargarok at gmail.com Thanks!

Re: Jasmine Cowl And the Salagi Talking Stick

PostPosted: Sun Jan 06, 2013 10:59 pm
by earthwulf
gotcha. and I edited the email, just in case the spambots broke thru :)